Ireallyhadaninterestingandshortwinterholiday.OntheJanuary23rd,itsnowedinChongQing.Ifeltsurpisedandhappy.Iquicklywentouthouse.AndIaccompaniedwithmylittlesistertobuildasnowman.Thatsagoodday.Duringwinterholiday,Ialwaysgotupat11oclock.ThenIhadbreakfastandlunchathalfpast12.Afterthat,Ididdishsanddidmyhomework.Theniwentshoppingwithmyfriendsandwedrunkafternoonteatogther.Ilikesportsverymuch.Duringwinterholiday.Ioftenruninmorning.Becauseitcanhelpmetobulidmystrength.Inaword,Imveryhappyonholiday.
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Ireallyhadaninterestingbutshortwinterholiday.
OntheJanuary23rd,itsnowedinChongQing.Ifeltsurpisedandhappy.Iquicklywentoutofthehouse.AndImadeasnowmanwithmylittlesister.Thenwehadasnowballfight.Althoughitwascold,webothfeltveryhappy.
Duringwinterholiday,Ialwaysgotupat11oclock.Afterlunch,Ididthedishesanddidmyhomework.Ifmyfriendscametoseeme,wealwayswentshoppingandhadafternoonteatogther.
Ialsodidsportsduringwinterholiday.Ioftendidamorningrun.Becauseitcanhelpmetobulidmystrength.
Inaword,Ihadanicewinterholiday.
修改老师：Andy老师
高一:秦瑶
